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Old 03-03-2010, 04:00 PM   #1
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Please help me name my short story?

its about jessica and zack who are best friends

here is the first part

Sweat was dripping down her face as she ran down the court. She had 14 seconds to make the shot 12, 11, she jumped, the ball swooshed through the net breaking the tie. Jessica had always been into sports, and guys had always been into her'but the one guy who didn't like her was the one guy who she had always wanted to be with.

After the game she was going to have pizza with her best friend Zack. She had had a crush on him since 6th grade, but they have been friends since they were four years old.
After the game she ran to meet Zack. He was waiting for her by his 96' Mustang Cobra smiling and laughing at her as she triped over her own feet. "How do you play ball with no balance?" he asked her. She smiled and got into the car.
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Old 03-03-2010, 04:30 PM   #2
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Please help me name my short story?

How about:
"Secret Wants"
"Hidden Desire"
"Wished Love"
"Longing for him"

That's all I got.
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Old 03-03-2010, 05:26 PM   #3
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Zack and jess/ Jess and Zack.
You need some serious work on that though. You can't just jump from a basketball game to describing the her dating life in the same paragraph it makes no sense, and will confuse the reader. Work on your transitions.
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Old 03-03-2010, 06:09 PM   #4
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friends forever

great writing
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Old 03-03-2010, 06:50 PM   #5
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i don't have a name suggestion, but........
talented writing!!!!!!!!!!
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