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Old 03-31-2010, 11:00 AM   #1
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im writing a report on Nevada and need to know if this is good. It will say look here for pics but there on a cologe so these are just words...




Nevada


The state of Nevada was claimed as the 36th state on October 31, 1864.Thats when it became an official state. Nevada’s nicknames are Sagebrush State, Battle Born State, and the most known nickname is the Silver State. The meaning of the name of our state “Nevada” is snow-capped in Spanish. Here are some facts about Nevada; the population is about 1,998,257 people. It’s the 35th largest state (2000 census). Nevada’s Capital is Carson City. The state bird is the Mountain Bluebird and the state animal is the Desert Bighorn. The state flower is Sagebrush and the state tree is Single-leaf Pinon and the Bristlecone Pine. Our state precious gemstone is the Virgin Valley Black Fire Opal. The state song is Home Means Nevada.

Home means Nevada, Home means the hills. Home means the sage and the pine. Out by the Truckee’s silvery rills. Out where the sun always shines. There is the land that I love the best, fairer than all I can see. Right in the heart of the golden West, Home means Nevada to me.

Our state colors or silver and blue. And the state flag has a green reef looking type of thing on it with yellow flowers. Its says Nevada under a white star. Above the white star there is a scroll saying battle born. The background color of the flag is navy blue.
Our states motto is “all for our country.”


Here is a picture of what our state looks like,
Here is a picture of Carson city, our capital.




Nevada is the home of the wild mustangs, which is one of my favorite things about the state.



Nevada is bordered by Utah,Arazona,California,Oregon, and Idaho.


Here is a timeline of dates that are important to
Nevada.




• 1821 Mexico claimed the area after a successful revolt against Spain.
• 1840's Americans on the way to California traveled through the region.
• 1848 Nevada was part of the area ceded by Mexico to the United States.
• 1849 The first non-Indian settlement was made at Mormon Station (Genoa).
• 1850 When Utah Territory was organized, almost all of present-day Nevada was included except the southern tip, which was then part of the New Mexico Territory.
• 1859 The Comstock Lode of gold and silver was discovered at Virginia City, and many miners began coming from California.
• 1861 Congress created Nevada Territory. In 1862 the territory was enlarged by shifting the eastern boundary.
• 1863 Nevada became a state. In 1866 and 1867 more eastern land was gained from Utah Territory and the southern tip was acquired from Arizona Territory.
• 1880 - 1890 As the Comstock Lode declined, the state's population fell from 62,000 to 47,000.
• 1900 The discovery of silver at Tonopah, soon followed by gold strikes at Goldfield and the discovery of copper at Ely, led to a new mining boom that lasted until after World War I.


Those are some very important history dates of Nevada.


Here are all the cities in Nevada
Alamo
Town Lincoln
Amargosa Valley

Arden

Ash Springs

Austin

Baker

Battle Mountain

Beatty

Beowawe

Blue Diamond
CDP
Clark
Boulder City
City

Bunkerville
CDP Clark
Cal-Nev-Ari
CDP Clark
Caliente

Carlin

Carson City
City
CDP smallest CDP in the state
Cold Springs

Crescent Valley

Crystal

Crystal Bay

Dayton

Delamar Ghost Town

Denio

Duckwater

Dyer

East

Ely

Elko

Empire

Enterprise
Town
Clark

Eureka

Fallon

Fernley

Gabbs

Gardnervillle
Town

Gardnerville Ranchos

Genoa
Town

Gerlach

Glenbrook

Glendale
CDP Clark
Golden Valley

Goldfield

Goodsprings
CDP Clark
Hawthorne

Henderson
City Clark
Hiko

Imlay

Incline Village

Indian Hills

Indian Springs
CDP
Town
Clark
Jackpot

Jarbidge

Jean

Jiggs

Johnson Lane

Kingsbury

Las Vegas
City Clark
Lamoille

Laughlin

Lemmon Valley

Logandale
Town Clark
Lovelock

Lund

McDermitt

McGill

Mesquite
City Clark
Minden
Town

Moapa Town
CDP Clark
Moapa Valley
CDP Clark
Montello

Mount Charleston
CDP Clark
Nixon

North Las Vegas
City Clark
Orovada

Overton
Town Clark
Owyhee

Pahrump
Nye

Panaca

Paradise

Paradise Valley

Pioche

Primm
Clark
Rachel

Reno
City Washoe

Round Hill Village

Round Mountain

Sandy Valley
CDP Clark
Schurz

Searchlight
CDP Clark
Silver Peak

Silver City

Silver Springs

Sloan
CDP Clark
Smith

Spanish Springs

Sparks
City Washoe

Spring Creek

Spring Valley
CDP
Town Clark

Stateline

Summerlin South
CDP
Town Clark

Sun Valley

Sunrise Manor
CDP
Town Clark

Sutcliffe

Tonopah

Tuscarora

Verdi

Virginia City

Wadsworth

Wellington

Wells

West Wendover

Winnemucca

Whitney
CDP
Town Clark

Winchester
CDP
Town Clark

Yerington

Zephyr Cove



Nevada has a lot of beautiful scenery look here.
One thing you guys might know about Nevada, is Sarah Winnemucca. This is what the wikipedia says about her in the first paragraph, Sarah Winnemucca (born Thocmentony, Paiute: Shell Flower )which is now western Nevada… (ca. 1841 – October 17, 1891) was notable for being the first Native American woman known to secure a copyright and to publish in the English language. She was also known by her married name, Sarah Winnemucca Hopkins, under which she was published. Her book, Life Among the Paiutes: Their Wrongs and Claims, is an autobiographical account of her people during their first forty years of contact with explorers and settlers.
Sarah was a person of two worlds. At the time of her birth her people had only very limited contact with Euro-Americans; however she spent much of her adult life in white society. Like many people of two worlds, she may be judged harshly in both contexts. Many Paiutes view her as a collaborator who helped the U.S. Army kill her people. Modern historians view her book as an important primary source, but one that is deliberately misleading in many instances. Despite this, Sarah has received much positive attention recently for her activism. She was inducted into the Nevada Writers Hall of Fame in 1993, and in 2005 a statue of her was added to the National Statuary Hall Collection in the U.S. Capitol.
That says a lot about her. Sarah Winnemucca is very well known for bringing peace between Americans and Indians. Nevada is well known for her. Because she was born in what is now western Nevada. She is now in the Nevada hall of fame.


Nevada is apart of the Great Basin desert. You can see many miles of beautiful mountains, sagebrush, animals, and so much more!!! Nevada has one of the lowest average rainfalls out of the fifty states: nine inches. You may have heard the poem Mountains as Islands which says the following,

Mountains as Islands
Each range here is like a warship standing on its own, and the Great Basin is an ocean of loose sediment with these mountain ranges standing in it as if they were members of a fleet without precedent, assembled at Guam to assault Japan. Some of the ranges are forty miles long, others a hundred, a hundred and fifty. They point generally north. The basins that separate them-ten and fifteen miles wide-will run on for fifty, a hundred, two hundred and fifty miles with lone, daisy-petalled windmills standing over sage and wild rye. …Discounting the cry of the occasional bird, the wailing of a pack of coyotes, silence-a great spatial silence- is pure in the Basin and Range. It is a soundless immensity with mountains in it.
-John McPhee
Basin and Range, 1980
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Old 03-31-2010, 11:22 AM   #2
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Is this and A paper????

I can't read it all, but from what I skimmed it seems like you're just bulleting. Try listing in more creative ways.
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Old 03-31-2010, 12:20 PM   #3
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Okay, I have to admit, I got half way down..... skipped some, read some more... then skipped some.

Work on your orginization and grammar. Other than that, I can imagine writing about Nevada wasn't very exciting (As it wasn't very exciting for any of us to read) but Good Job!!
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Old 03-31-2010, 12:45 PM   #4
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a report on nevada or something
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Old 03-31-2010, 01:25 PM   #5
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To be honest, right now it is not a A paper. But it can be. Just a twiking with the words, spell check and a little bit more interesting facts about Neveda. right now it is a high C or Low B. depending on what grade your in.
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Old 03-31-2010, 01:32 PM   #6
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This is a good paper, especially for 4th grade. But ways to improve would be to "shortlist" the points. I.E. cut down on the bullet points, and dont list them as bullet points. Explain them each in a sentence and explain about them.

Also, at the end end with "to conclude," or "in conclusion" and sum up the paper and the point you are making in writing the paper, and the most important bit of your conclusion, your opinion!

GOOD LUCK!

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Old 03-31-2010, 01:43 PM   #7
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Is this and A paper????

You have a lot of spelling and grammar errors that would preclude you from getting an A. Also, this reads like you simply copied information from a bunch of books or from the Internet. Nothing original.

It's a weak C paper at best.
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Old 03-31-2010, 02:24 PM   #8
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This paper has alot of interesting ideas, but you have to put them into complete thoughts. I just seems like a rumbling on of ideas. Make it more like a story. Choose some of the most important things that stood out to you and expound on them.
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Old 03-31-2010, 02:28 PM   #9
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It just looks like random stats.. hard to read, very unorganized! >.<
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Old 03-31-2010, 03:16 PM   #10
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I didn&#039;t read the whole thing but what I did read was actually pretty good! I really liked. I would grade it as a B or an A.
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Old 03-31-2010, 03:53 PM   #11
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What grade is this for?
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Old 03-31-2010, 04:11 PM   #12
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sorrry i fell asleep
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Old 03-31-2010, 04:29 PM   #13
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You really need to find someone to edit this. There are typos, spelling mistakes, and grammatical errors everywhere. Here are a few things you should never do in formal writing.

-Use personal pronouns.
-Use multiple exclamation points.
-Use wikipedia as a source.
-Create lists of irrelevant information.
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Old 03-31-2010, 05:11 PM   #14
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As a substitute I would think you have to do a bit more work.

Please specify why those people or places are important & what roles they did.
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I thought it was a little labored. You have to lose yourself in the moment and loosen up.
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Old 03-31-2010, 06:00 PM   #16
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I&#039;m surprised you think someone would read that whole thing.
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Old 03-31-2010, 06:47 PM   #17
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Based upon spelling, grammar, and sentence structure, I would have to say it is not going to get you an "A".
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Old 03-31-2010, 07:42 PM   #18
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Good Job, it&#039;s really good. You could get an A- or an A on it. Depending on your teachers view. I would give you an A-.

If your in grade 7+ you will get something above 85% for sure
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C- Try to pull your facts together a little more...
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It would depend on the course and grade level. There is too much summary and not enough of your own analysis. Try breaking it up into more paragraphs, too.

Do not create such large lists, either. Good luck!
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GOOD JOB ITS GREAT
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